Poem Rewrites

I had to rewrite 3 of my poems for my Intro. to Creative Writing class final portfolio, so I thought I would put up the changes here. Let me know if you like the originals better or the edited ones :)

#1 Ode to a Good Book in Bed
original @ http://sfraww.blogspot.com/2013/01/ode-to-good-book-in-bed.html

To my beloved comrade Book,
Over ten years you have been a companion of mine,
Your many subjects reel in bookworms like a hook,
Sci-Fi/ Fantasy and more to choose from throughout time,
Where should we start to take a look?

Your crisp, new pages waiting to be read,
Or maybe yellowing leafs shown much love instead,
You fill wooden shelves with your family and friends,
In public and private lives, some in heartthrobs till the end.

But who doesn't like a first-class book in bed?

After a hard daydreams work and faces turned red,
Come under a warm blanket on an arctic winter night,
Lay down and give thanks for your soft pillow so light,
Thank God for books and beds, rest well and sleep tight!

#2 Most Influential Person in History
original @ http://sfraww.blogspot.com/2013/02/most-influential-person-in-history.html

Who deserves to be ranked #1
of the most influential people in history?
Would you give the title to Einstein, your daughter or son?
I promise, it's really not a mystery!

Before the great men and women in time
are given credit or praise,
Mothers should be first in line,
For these individuals they raised.

We all recognize the respect our mothers deserve,
And would even fight others to defend them,
But then where do we get the nerve,
To ignore, hurt, or even curse at some?

For giving birth to you and the pain they went through,
The time and effort they put in,
Raising, teaching, and taking care of you,
Disobeying them in good is a great sin! (1)

You love her home cooked chicken, comfort, and advice,
There is almost nothing she wouldn’t do for you,
The least you could do is be helpful and nice,
Like do all your chores and hers too.

Mothers deserve the best for these reasons and many others,
You will never be able to pay her back for all she has done,
It's been said, "No matter what a man does, he will never be able to have the status of a mother,"
And that's why she is #1!

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(1) In Islam, when parents advise something good according to God, we should try our best to do so. Likewise, when they tell us something that we shouldn't do because God said so, it is not a sin to not listen to them. For example, if they remind one to pray and one doesn’t, one is sinning. But, if they tell one to take off their head scarf, then one shouldn’t and isn't considered sinful.

#3 Mirror, Mirror, on the Wall, Who's the Prettiest of Them All?
original @ http://sfraww.blogspot.com/2013/03/mirror-mirror-on-wall-whos-ugliest-of.html

Look in the mirror,
What do you see?
Eyes focused on imperfections,
Standing out so clearly.

You think you are too Fat,
Skinny, TALL, short, black, or white,
Small eyes, big nose,
Hair somehow not right.

Criticizing and putting yourself down,
Comparing yourself to others,
Too busy changing appearances,
Rather than the inside which matters.

TV and magazines make you feel insecure,
You’re constantly told what to do,
To attract attention and “enjoy” life,
But you should really be true to You.

Appreciate your functioning body,
And nice-looking features,
Love and respect yourself first,
Because we are God's special creatures.